假定你是李華，你校來自愛爾蘭的外教Peter因病回國休假。請給他寫一封電子郵件，內容包括:1.詢問近況；2.分...

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假定你是李華，你校來自愛爾蘭的外教Peter因病回國休假。請給他寫一封電子郵件，內容包括:1. 詢問近況；2. 分享班級最新消息；3. 表達祝願。

注意:1. 詞數80左右；2. 可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。

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【回答】

Dear Peter,

I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave. How are you feeling now?

I hope my good news for you will sweep away the shadow of disease. Last month, an English festival was held in our school, and our class performed a song which you taught us at the festival. As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause. If only you had been there.

We all miss you very much and wish you a quick and complete recovery.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

【分析】

本篇書面表達屬於應用文，要求考生寫一封郵件，向因病假回國休假的外教老師詢問近況，分享消息和表達祝願。

【詳解】第一步：審題

體裁：應用文

時態：根據提示，時態應為一般過去時和一般現在時。

結構：三段式結構。第一段詢問近況；第二段告知班級消息；第三段表達祝願。

要求：1.詢問近況（How are you feeling now?）

2.告知班級消息（my good news; performed a song which you taught us）

3.表達祝願（wish you a quick and complete recovery）

第二步:列提綱（重點詞組）

be sorry to do; on sick leave; sweep away; as soon as; give sb. warm applause; recovery

第三步：連詞成句

1. I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave.

2. I hope my good news for you will sweep away the shadow of disease.

3. As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause.

4. We all miss you very much and wish you a quick and complete recovery.

根據提示及關鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態問題。

連句成文，注意使用恰當的連詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規範清晰，

第五步：潤*修改

【點睛】範文內容完整，要點全面，語言規範，語篇連貫，詞數適當，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關係。

1.作者範文中使用了主從複合句，如：

I am sorry to hear that you have gone back home on sick leave.( 聽説你請病假回家了，我很難過。)這句話運用了that 引導賓語從句。

Last month, an English festival was held in our school, and our class performed a song which you taught us at the festival.(上個月，我們學校舉辦了英語節，我們班在節上表演了一首您教我們的歌曲。)這句話運用了which引導限制*定語從句。

As soon as we finished the song, all the audience gave us warm applause.(我們一唱完這首歌，所有的觀眾都給了我們熱烈的掌聲。)這句話中as soon as引導時間狀語從句。

2.使用了一些固定詞組，如be sorry to do; on sick leave; sweep away; as soon as; give sb. warm applause等。

全文中沒有*式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉換自然，為文章增*添*。

知識點：提綱作文

題型：書面表達